Adding Emotion to Dialogue with Word Choice
You can show the emotion underlying dialogue by carefully picking the words to be spoken. Examine these alternatives:
“Mr. Ohrbach? What a surprise. I didn't know you were coming.”
“Mr. Ohrbach, you came! And I thought you'd forgotten.”
“Is that you, Mr. Ohrbach? Did you … I mean, are you sure you want to be here?”
“Mr. Ohrbach? Who the hell invited you?”
“Why, Mr. Ohrbach. So you decided to grace us with your presence.”
The dialogue in each of these examples conveys information as well as emotion and attitude. Sometimes, the right punctuation and words are all you need.